I've been <u>really</u> busy. I'm lucky I got that verse in. My next verse should be up later tonight.
<div class="quote_poster">Laker_fan Wrote</div><div class="quote_post">Where are these infamous listings?</div> I believe its on the 9th page of the Sign Up thread.
Umair, you've definately improved. So far, IMO your beating Carter. Just try not to make your lines soo long, cause sometimes its off on the flow factor.
<div class="quote_poster">Quote:</div><div class="quote_post">Hand me the MIP Award, I am improving so much You can call me Tmac cuz I am the best when it comes to clutch</div>. Lol, isnt this the one you made upin the JBB sign up thread?
<div class="quote_poster">Locke Wrote</div><div class="quote_post">Let's hear some comments about the battle between me and GotSkillz.</div> comments or is there one more round? it's pretty close right now but for me, gotskillz had TWO knockout lines - the one about Borat and Pamela and the one about the flag with the red leaf. if Locke is to get my vote, he's going to have to get a couple of knockout lines in the last round.....
<div class="quote_poster">CPaulDWade#3 Wrote</div><div class="quote_post">. Lol, isnt this the one you made upin the JBB sign up thread?</div> And...... It was mines wasn't it? <div class="quote_poster">Iggy Wrote</div><div class="quote_post">Umair, you've definately improved. So far, IMO your beating Carter. Just try not to make your lines soo long, cause sometimes its off on the flow factor.</div> I edited some parts, read it again and tell me if its better.
<div class="quote_poster">Umair Wrote</div><div class="quote_post">And...... It was mines wasn't it? I edited some parts, read it again and tell me if its better.</div> I checked it out again. <div class="quote_poster">Quote:</div><div class="quote_post">Always be on caution he might be like a friend of Osama on TV holdin' a gunThis isn't even my best, its yo boy Umair coming for that number one </div> Better, but I think the second last line is still too long. When I read it, I don't really get a feel of how its supposed to flow. Maybe cut some more words out. Like "Be careful, Carter might be Osama's friend; holding a gun"
<div class="quote_poster">Chutney Wrote</div><div class="quote_post">Never compliment your opponent in a battle.</div> Other than that how was it? Better than my first verse? I've been busy so these two were some of the quickest verses that I have ever posted.
Definitely better than your first, but I still get the impression that you're wasting lines. Your beginning and end were kind of pointless.
Always compliment your opponents in your battle, you are more likely to get a compliment in return! lol, I've never battled before.