(sorry for the double post, i just have to inform) The long awaited Debut, of Venotorious is finally here.
<div class="quote_poster">Epidemik Wrote</div><div class="quote_post">Pretty nice verse by both. Notorious caught me by surprise, but you ended your verse off weak.</div> I did? At least i didnt use worser.
<div class="quote_poster">Notorious Wrote</div><div class="quote_post">Lol, i doubt he improved, just Chutney helped him with lines.</div> I wrote my own lines. Chutney just fixed the spacing to flow better with his.
<div class="quote_poster">Carter Wrote</div><div class="quote_post">I wrote my own lines. Chutney just fixed the spacing to flow better with his.</div> Ok, i was joking BTW
What yall think of our second verse? I'm trying to focus more on keeping a good flow this time around, since that was my main problem last competition, but still getting some good shots in when it comes to punch lines.
<div class="quote_poster">Blur Wrote</div><div class="quote_post">What yall think of our second verse? I'm trying to focus more on keeping a good flow this time around, since that was my main problem last competition, but still getting some good shots in when it comes to punch lines.</div> Pretty good, but something that helps with flow is line length consistency. Try to keep all of your lines at about the same length. BTW, what do yall think of The Venotorious Debut
<div class="quote_poster">Blur Wrote</div><div class="quote_post">What yall think of our second verse? I'm trying to focus more on keeping a good flow this time around, since that was my main problem last competition, but still getting some good shots in when it comes to punch lines.</div> It sucked.. We will post later today..So keep on watching..Got a hot one coming for both of you guys'.
<div class="quote_poster">Umair Wrote</div><div class="quote_post">It sucked.. We will post later today..So keep on watching..Got a hot one coming for both of you guys'.</div> It cant have been no worser than yours Umair...
<div class="quote_poster">Blur Wrote</div><div class="quote_post">It cant have been no worser than yours Umair...</div> Lol. Umair, you do know you could have just used Worse? And hes got a worse record then mine. Instead of "And he got a worser record then mine" or and his record is worser then mine. OOOH, now they edit it, lol.
Dang, Umair, why are you so sensitive to little things? Were playing with you, and you just go all sad on us. Now we know who we shouldnt mess around with...
<div class="quote_poster">Blur Wrote</div><div class="quote_post">When's this battle end? Me and J_Ray will respond as soon as we both get online at the same time.</div> 2 verses a piece, deadline on friday.
