<div class="quote_poster">Locke Wrote</div><div class="quote_post">I vote for phundamentalz. He started out weak but ended it with a bang; that last verse was fire. Fresh was more consistent but his lines were pretty generic and lacked phun's fatal touch IMO.</div> Weird, I thought phun was more consistent
<div class="quote_poster">Locke Wrote</div><div class="quote_post">I vote for phundamentalz. He started out weak but ended it with a bang; that last verse was fire. Fresh was more consistent but his lines were pretty generic and lacked phun's fatal touch IMO.</div> Which lines were generic? I want to get better you know. Keep the votes coming. <div class="quote_poster">Quote:</div><div class="quote_post">p.s. sorry if i'm a bit harsh</div> Boy Mrs J I sure was intimidated by that harsh warning!!
<div class="quote_poster">Air Fresh Wrote</div><div class="quote_post">Eyo you gotta explain your vote for it to count.</div> Both phun and you had some good lines. I just like your rhymes more.
<div class="quote_poster">Air Fresh Wrote</div><div class="quote_post">Which lines were generic? I want to get better you know. Keep the votes coming. Boy Mrs J I sure was intimidated by that harsh warning!!</div> wasn't a warning just being a good competitor smarten up
<div class="quote_poster">phunDamentalz Wrote</div><div class="quote_post">wasn't a warning just being a good competitor smarten up</div> Yeah I know it wasn't, MrsJ was the one who said it was, I wasn't talking about you mane, just strictly talking to MrsJ.
<div class="quote_poster">Air Fresh Wrote</div><div class="quote_post">Yeah I know it wasn't, MrsJ was the one who said it was, I wasn't talking about you mane, just strictly talking to MrsJ.</div> okay "mane" well it's 4-3 in favor of me right now, maybe NTC187 or Dream or another rap aficionado can get in here and settle this?
<div class="quote_poster">Air Fresh Wrote</div><div class="quote_post">Which lines were generic? I want to get better you know. Keep the votes coming. Boy Mrs J I sure was intimidated by that harsh warning!!</div> I feel ya, Stinky Air. Phun definitely has skills.
<div class="quote_poster">Air Fresh Wrote</div><div class="quote_post">Which lines were generic? I want to get better you know. Keep the votes coming. Boy Mrs J I sure was intimidated by that harsh warning!!</div> Not really 'generic' in the sense of the word, just that your lines all sound alike. From the three battles I've followed of yours, your lines just seem to be repetitive. Sure, you've changed them up but they still pack the same punch. Yout hit MrJ hard but since then your lines have become boring and predictable. Maybe change up your pace, or come up with some lines that surprise people.
rapologists online now please vote (preferably for me) but for whoever you think is good.......................................
Phun had killer lines of his own, but I got tired of the "you must be bored" crap and the "your mom in a thong" ****. My fav lines from AF: I like how Umair's name shows up in every battle. <div class="quote_poster">Air Fresh Wrote</div><div class="quote_post"> If my opponents get in my way, then I demolish them—right now I’m in the tractor An you pretty brave, cause battling Fresh should be a Stunt on Fear Factor </div> <div class="quote_poster">Air Fresh Wrote</div><div class="quote_post"> Yall NYC dudes gas ya selves up, there must be something in ya air 9-1 in voting so far, I'd have better competition against Umair </div> A nice like by Phun: <div class="quote_poster">phunDamentalz Wrote</div><div class="quote_post"> that's right rounds 1 and 2 for you were pure FLUKE i'm showing you who's the daddy like Darth Vader to LUKE </div> Finally, Phun had better lines overall and better disses, although talkin about FLA and NY got kinda weak. AF's lines were iffy, he had some killer ones but the rest was a little too weak to compete with Phun. I got bored of the whole peeling orange ****, getting the nuts waxed (didn't make sense really), momma in a thong, and you must be bored thing. That just killed it for Phun. My Vote: AF.
<div class="quote_poster">TwinTowers Wrote</div><div class="quote_post">Both phun and you had some good lines. I just like your rhymes more.</div> I think a better explanation is needed. What about AF's rhymes did you like better?
Okay, I'm going to just post what I think of each verse as I read them. I'll bold what I think are the strong lines and italisize (sp) what I think are the weaker lines. I'm going to be very frank because in the end it's constructive critiscm so take it how you want it. VERSE 1 <div class="quote_poster">Quote:</div><div class="quote_post"> whaddup little air fresh - or is it dumb bitch you call out new york that was a real dumb pitch youre mad cause in florida there ain't nothing to do cept sit by the AC and peel some oranges dude... that humid air is really sogging up your brain cause challenging NY is a very foolish game the warm weather must be nice don't get me wrong you get to watch your mom walk around in a thong life must be sweet in a state where everybody's eighty eight i bet you get some nice ***** down there - shriveled up fish bait you mention *** a few times in your rhymes that **** was Freudian no wonder you brag about how you are so Floridian cause you're from a state that's shaped like a penis go get your FLA-ggots and we'll see who the hottest team is </div> I didn't really find this verse all that strong overall. The flow was on point most of the time, although it kinda slipped with the Freudian/Floridian line. The warm weather line didn't make any sense, I don't really understand why you're praising his state, and the mom walking in thong line was just weak. <div class="quote_poster">Quote:</div><div class="quote_post"> Phundamentalz you failed to realized that I’m in a league you can’t stand with That means you can’t see AF, like your hosting account exceeded bandwith It takes work to get to the top, so on the way ya face is what I am Stompin You got a better chance surviving with red and blue clothes threw the city of Compton If my opponents get in my way, then I demolish them—right now I’m in the tractor An you pretty brave, cause battling Fresh should be a Stunt on Fear Factor But you really think you have a chance? Son for you to win, there is really no-way Everybody knows I got this bitch killed; I should change my rap name to Fresh-O-Jay AF-Venom does it again, providing JBB with another Flamer You accepted the challenge? Man you got more balls than Kramer AF-Venom is a high quality MC, Phundamentalz is just a damn scrub So in other words you cannot win, you might as well start the AF fan club I won’t be faded, my raps on chronic disease--and to my opponents I’m just sicker You Jay Feely soft, and the last New Yorker left—so I will definitely beat the kicker I’m Pirating NYC, it’s in your best interest just to abandon the ship This is the 91 First Round Series, I'm gettin 3 Wins and the Yorkers gettin zip*</div> Some of your bars are really long ("You Jay Feely soft, and the last New Yorker left—so I will definitely beat the kicker" and "This is the 91 First Round Series, I'm gettin 3 Wins and the Yorkers gettin zip") and don't really flow in well with the rest of the verse. However, you had much stronger punches then that of phun. I though the OJ (orange juice/OJ Simpson) line you had was great (assuming you really were erferencing to both things) and so were the compton and fear factor lines. Only gripe with your verse would be the long bars and referring yourself as AF Venom at the beginning of two lines one after the other. Verdict: AF wins. VERSE 2 <div class="quote_poster">Quote:</div><div class="quote_post"> Stinky Air, i don't know nothing 'bout Jay Feely All i know is all the jbballers feel me And this is b-ball so quit talking N-F-L I'd rather live in hell than live in the F-L You caught Mister Jay on an off day big deal Then you called me out thinking you could keep it real I read your battle with Gotskillz and no wonder he's bitter I've had more lucid lines than you sitting on the shitter Your tired-ass raps are giving new meaning to wack That's five minutes of my life I won't get back You South Beach queen you probably get your nuts waxed Stupid rat you just walked into my trap Florida mouse tried to step into my house? Bitch please you must be retarded to take that route Should be illegal the **** that flows out of your mouth you think you're fresh go check your pits you need Axe Dry it's just too bad they don't make Odor Eaters for rhymes You ride a tractor, well that's really no surprise You're just a hick spreading manure in all your lines You're like a deaf dude trying to play musical chairs Or like a blind man trying to run down the stairs Talking about Kramer's balls well that is just wrong And now i can't shake that picture of your mom in a thong This battle's over but the nightmares are just beginning I guess everything has it's price including Winning..... </div> Way too many generic/off-point lines in this one. The hick line, mom line and stupid rat lines all oculd have been better written or replaced with much better lines overall. It was an allright verse, but you need to cut down on personals that aren't really..all that personal. I don't think AF is a hick so I don't understand you calling him one and going back to the first rap tourney, mom/family jokes don't really work in keystyles. <div class="quote_poster">Quote:</div><div class="quote_post"> This is b-ball? ok, that means that I am the King of the Deuce With your corny nursery rhymes, I've read better from Dr. Seus Talkin greasy about the FL? You just need to take a seat dog You spit fuc**n garbage, cause you inhale all that NY smog Your sh!it is below subpar, but my rhymes are hella-stella Air Fresh is starting his own dynasty in NYC like Rockafella Man I got people across the country that always got my back And I might wax my nuts, cause ya girl likes a clean sack Even if I was musty, compared to you I'm still way more flyer AF-Venom, I ride tracks better than them NASCAR Drivers I live in the south so I'm a "hick"? Please, how original is that? Also when is the last time a damn hick could be black? Ask the last two dudes, lethal lyrical weapons is what I toat. I got witnesses and your one of them, check ya last vote By typing more lines, its just your weakness that you are showing Killin you in this battle, so hell is really where you will be going I usually stick to simplistic sick sixteens, but I've got something else in store Another round cause like my hos, JBB is just begging B for more Yall NYC dudes gas ya selves up, there must be something in ya air 9-1 in voting so far, I'd have better competition against Umair The New Fresh Prince, I'm sentencing this lame a$$ dame to exile "Long range shooting"? Add Rapping to Weaknesses in ya JBB Profile If you think you got Fresh beat, you must be living on fantasy, island!! I've never heard of any good rapper that comes from Dublin, Ireland!! </div> lol nice closer, and your verse was nice. Way to flip that hick line back on him, that was strong, but ease up on some of the generic lines (about ho's specifically). Your flow was better on this verse. VERDICT: AF wins. VERSE 3 <div class="quote_poster">Quote:</div><div class="quote_post"> you got no game so you click on my profile then you bring up Umair cause you really can't freestyle yeah you get your insights from the J-B-B- forum you should be an operator on 1-800-BOREDOM and yeah i went on long cause i got a lot to say what can i say there's not that much to do today i like my job when the boss is a-way I get to beat orlando girls who want to play and plus my rhymes are gifts i've got to get them off my chest I spit more jewels than you can spit Crest um okay i didn't realize that you are black that fact alone makes you ten times more wack where is the inherent dopeness inside of you? my rhymes attack you like mace kid- theyre blinding you making up words like "my rhymes are hella stella" just so you could use your wack line about Rockafella and how long you been holding that NASCAR line in your pocket? going on the internet trying to find the right time to drop it? that s**ts transparent fool my words fly off the dome you call me corny dawg but you're inducing groans My raps are steaks while you're biting off the bone This contest to me is like Chi-town to Capone Cause i own this b!tch no one can take me down Just like your girl I got this gagged and bound Trust me in this lair nobody can touch me Not even you a Cat in the Hat who just got lucky cause gotskills has em and Mr Jay can spit they don't keep coming with that same recycled s!!t that's right rounds 1 and 2 for you were pure FLUKE i'm showing you who's the daddy like Darth Vader to LUKE NY rappers are sweet - yours are diabetic why don't you take your game up north where s**t gets hectic? and yeah i live on fantasy island whats it to ya? better than repping dick-riding peninsula i'll let you have the last word it's only fair JBBallers y'all beware here comes a weakling with a half a yard stare prolly bout to drop a few more turds about Umair.... </div> NICE! Your strongest verse so far BY FAR. The first 4 lines were great, but then you killed it with the 4 lines that came after that. The black/wack line doesn't really make any sense to me and seems irrelevant and the Rockafella flipped line is good, but the irony is that while you're dissing his rhyming style, you used the exact same rhyming that he did to make your punch. The Nascar line was solid - a great counter, and then after that you had a couple of good lines/bad lines. A solid verse overall though. If you had come like this in your other two, you would have had a much better shot at taking this. <div class="quote_poster">Quote:</div><div class="quote_post"> Being in this battle with me, with ya rap career ya gambling Cause you are'nt talking about sh!t, just mumblin and ramblin I come with recycled sh!t? For real how ironic can you get Half of your lines are f**kin bull, about the state I represent AF-Venom, you know I shine whenever the light be lime Be killing these NY "ballas", like I was Air Jordan in his prime -- <font color=""Indigo"">[line would have been better if you'd put Reggie Miller but whatever]</font> Clutch, so I got the rock in my hands whenever the game is on the line And this battle is the Sixth game in Utah, therefore the victory is mine To some I'm a beast, but to you, I'm an entire different species On the other hand your disses and rebutalls are nothing but straight Feces Its obvious I'm killin this dude lyrically, there is no need for investigation and Its obvious that my rhymes are the sh!t, and go harder than constipation The First quarter is over, in the second AF-Venom will unleash the wrath I’ll have ya ass in the MRI room; I guarantee you won’t make it into the half With ya b**ch a$$ lines, your verses are really not even respectable You don’t want beef with B; you should stick to eating vegetables With your fuc**n lame rhymes, your miniscule, so they don't hurt-me Far from boring, but I'll knock you out, like Thanksgiving Turkey When it comes to hot lines and hot rhymes, AF-Venom has got a hunch for a bunch And In the game I’m hungry, so I eat wack MCs for breakfast*, dinner*, and lunch* (“Gotskillz”*, Mr. J*, Phundamentalz*) </div> Nice verse once again. You gotta stop referencing to yourself in the 3rd person though, do it once or somehting but you did it like 3 times in this verse. Can't really complain about the verse, it was great all the way through...just work on cutting down some words i nsome of your bars cause most of your bars still tend to be way too long to flow smoothly with the line above it. That's all. Verdict: AF Wins Well, that's 3 straight verses that AF took, so obviously AF gets my vote. Good battle guys.
Wow, great job to both of you. Now lets see if you can sweep Canada too Fresh? LOL just playing, but damn you've really improved and thats just crazy how you held your own in 3 battles against 3 tough opponents.
