Non of them are better, but you've got to implement them both Umair. Its always good to compare, but what use is it if it doesnt rhyme. It more like a dissing competition than a freestyle battle. Heres something I do when I find something good to compare: I think of how I can make it sound legit in a battle, for example when you were gonna use the thing about Tmac's 13 in 35 you could say "I'll keep dropping rhymes til the end like Tmacs 13 in 35" The next step is to think of some words that will rhyme with 5. For example arrive, live, hive, strive, thrive, survive, alive, revive. Then use one of those words and somehow tie it into you're rap. So for example if you used alive you could be like "After this lyrical assasination you'll barely make it out alive" Then you put it together, always putting the punchline second. You should never put you're punchline first because after you say it, the next line is just dull. So you build up by doing the alive part first, then posting the 13 in 35 second. "After this lyrical assasination you'll barely make it out alive, I'll keep dropping rhymes til the end like Tmacs 13 in 35'
Go back to the original official rap battle thread, where Junoon aka Karma posted a link about how to rap, freestyle, ect. Its long but if you just read some of it, it helps you.
<div class="quote_poster">Iggy Wrote</div><div class="quote_post">Whatchu guys think about my first verse against Swish15?</div> Pretty nice start, I never was crazy about how Smitty and you type your lines like that though. I guess its because I'm so used to how I type mine.
Nice, you turned the fluid line around pretty well. Now I'm on Thanksgiving break and I wanna battle someone, whats good phuNdamentalz? If I beat you then I'd have the NY JBB battlers beat.
<div class="quote_poster">Quoting Iggy:</div><div class="quote_post">but swish, you call more bluffs than the whole entire vegas casino</div> Isn't this a compliment?
Also for the next tourney I think a new judging system should be used. Not really feeling the voting thing.
<div class="quote_poster">Chutney Wrote</div><div class="quote_post">Isn't this a compliment?</div> To me thats a dis. Its like he's saying all this shiz in the battle to PRETEND he's better than me when he isnt.
<div class="quote_poster">Chutney Wrote</div><div class="quote_post">Yea, but calling a bluff means you're picking someone out for their fakeness.</div> Fine, I'll change it up LOL
<div class="quote_poster">Air Fresh Wrote</div><div class="quote_post">Nice, you turned the fluid line around pretty well. Now I'm on Thanksgiving break and I wanna battle someone, whats good phuNdamentalz? If I beat you then I'd have the NY JBB battlers beat.</div> wow is that the way you want to spend thanksgiving - losing to me? bring it if you want, set up the thread and i'll see you there.
lol, you didn't have to change the whole line. You could've said: "but swish, you bluff more than the whole entire vegas casino" Oh well, they're both good lines.
